Haiku

Cordoban Addick

Watching/listening to the beginning of Danny Baker (on another thread) I thought it was about time we had a few Charlton Haikus.

For last season.

New buds need to flower

Old mediocre seasons blossom falls in winter

springtime brings no valley joy 

Cordoban Addick

For the comming season.

many summers new seeds sown

Fuji-san provides flowering growth, roots spread quickly

enlightenment reached before spring passes

hawksmoor

For next season's away trip to Rochdale:

Frost this morning and

a cold wind, scatters leaves like

broken promises

Uboat

Or last season in general:

Winter breathes change through the landscape

Spring flowers wither under ice

Football is shit

hawksmoor

The bare limbs of the

trees shiver in the wind

We've had one shot on goal

LawrieAbrahams

Don't mean to quibble

but syllables in haiku

number seventeen

hawksmoor

But isn't in that the case in the Japanese-language version of the Haiku? I don't know if English haiku is bound by the 17-syllable rule. For instance there's a well-known one word English haiku, which is, wait for it:



tundra



Jack Kerouac, a devotee of haiku, had this to say about it:

"The American Haiku is not exactly the Japanese
Haiku.  The Japanese Haiku is strictly disciplined
to seventeen syllables but since the language
structure is different I don't think American
Haikus (short three-line poems intended to be
completely packed with Void of Whole) should worry
about syllables because American speech is
something again...bursting to pop.
 

Cordoban Addick

LA - i believe that Hawksmoor is correct. By the way Hawkie and Ubby I thought your Haikus were much better than mine.

heavenly carp dance as one

fishermen watch for signs amongst april clouds

Docherty done for pace again

Algarveaddick

This is great stuff gentlemen

Please do keep it up

I'm really shit at haiku

 

Cordoban Addick

This is great stuff gentlemen

Please do keep it up

I'm really shit at haiku

 

And the rest of us are really good?

Cordoban Addick

Algarve contemplates bar snack truths

children whisper of spring rains that failed

emptyness, i'm shit at haiku

Algarveaddick

Brilliant! I am laughing out loud.  

LawrieAbrahams

Interesting stuff. I never thought I'd be educated about haiku on a Charlton website.

stonemuse

Valley dreams recall former glories

Onwards and upwards our new board shout

Wake up, This is Charlton

Cordoban Addick

Fuji-san contemplates epithet for stonemuse

spring blossoms on cherry trees of youth

reminds us that truth exists

hawksmoor

LA - i believe that Hawksmoor is correct. By the way Hawkie and Ubby I thought your Haikus were much better than mine.

heavenly carp dance as one

fishermen watch for signs amongst april clouds

Docherty done for pace again

Oh, mine were existing haikus with the last line changed. I'll try and come up with some originals.

hawksmoor

OK my attempt at an original haiku:


At dawn, the crystal silence

Snow dusts the mountain meadow

Elliott's been at the pasties again

Cordoban Addick

I was going to give you a red card for plagarism Hawkie, but that last haiku means you only get a yellow.

hawksmoor

If I come up with another one, will the yellow card get rescinded?

Cordoban Addick

If I come up with another one, will the yellow card get rescinded?

Can't do it sunshine. And you know what might happen if you appeal.

hawksmoor

Well, out of my sense of fair play, I've come up with another one:

As the brook runs slickly black,

An elm bends to the moon

Hartlepool's second goal looked off-side

Floyd Montana

A proper Japanese haiku must have a seasonal reference included.

And I dont mean '02/'03

Stig

Valley Floyd Road mist

Rolling in from the river

My desire? A win

Goodbye horse goodbye

he was saying goodbye horse

Oh Yippie Yi Ay

Sister and mother

are one and the same person

The Palace family

Beautiful haikus

I have not written a one

time to get me coat