Haiku
Watching/listening to the beginning of Danny Baker (on another thread) I thought it was about time we had a few Charlton Haikus.
For last season.
New buds need to flower
Old mediocre seasons blossom falls in winter
springtime brings no valley joy
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For the comming season.
many summers new seeds sown
Fuji-san provides flowering growth, roots spread quickly
enlightenment reached before spring passes
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For next season's away trip to Rochdale:
Frost this morning and
a cold wind, scatters leaves like
broken promises
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Or last season in general:
Winter breathes change through the landscape
Spring flowers wither under ice
Football is shit
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The bare limbs of the
trees shiver in the wind
We've had one shot on goal
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Don't mean to quibble
but syllables in haiku
number seventeen
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But isn't in that the case in the Japanese-language version of the Haiku? I don't know if English haiku is bound by the 17-syllable rule. For instance there's a well-known one word English haiku, which is, wait for it:
tundra
Jack Kerouac, a devotee of haiku, had this to say about it:"The American Haiku is not exactly the Japanese
Haiku. The Japanese Haiku is strictly disciplined
to seventeen syllables but since the language
structure is different I don't think American
Haikus (short three-line poems intended to be
completely packed with Void of Whole) should worry
about syllables because American speech is
something again...bursting to pop.
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LA - i believe that Hawksmoor is correct. By the way Hawkie and Ubby I thought your Haikus were much better than mine.
heavenly carp dance as one
fishermen watch for signs amongst april clouds
Docherty done for pace again
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This is great stuff gentlemen
Please do keep it up
I'm really shit at haiku
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And the rest of us are really good?This is great stuff gentlemen
Please do keep it up
I'm really shit at haiku
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Algarve contemplates bar snack truths
children whisper of spring rains that failed
emptyness, i'm shit at haiku
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Brilliant! I am laughing out loud.0
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Interesting stuff. I never thought I'd be educated about haiku on a Charlton website.0
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Valley dreams recall former gloriesOnwards and upwards our new board shoutWake up, This is Charlton0
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Fuji-san contemplates epithet for stonemuse
spring blossoms on cherry trees of youth
reminds us that truth exists
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Oh, mine were existing haikus with the last line changed. I'll try and come up with some originals.LA - i believe that Hawksmoor is correct. By the way Hawkie and Ubby I thought your Haikus were much better than mine.
heavenly carp dance as one
fishermen watch for signs amongst april clouds
Docherty done for pace again
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OK my attempt at an original haiku:
At dawn, the crystal silence
Snow dusts the mountain meadow
Elliott's been at the pasties again
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I was going to give you a red card for plagarism Hawkie, but that last haiku means you only get a yellow.0
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If I come up with another one, will the yellow card get rescinded?
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If I come up with another one, will the yellow card get rescinded?
Can't do it sunshine. And you know what might happen if you appeal.0 -
Well, out of my sense of fair play, I've come up with another one:
As the brook runs slickly black,
An elm bends to the moon
Hartlepool's second goal looked off-side
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A proper Japanese haiku must have a seasonal reference included.
And I dont mean '02/'03
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Valley Floyd Road mist
Rolling in from the river
My desire? A win
Goodbye horse goodbye
he was saying goodbye horse
Oh Yippie Yi Ay
Sister and mother
are one and the same person
The Palace family
Beautiful haikus
I have not written a one
time to get me coat
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